moosenoose
Legendary
The review so far??.
I?m sorry but I give this craptacular story 0/10. There?s no storyline, it jumps from character to character at a whim, there?s something going on about black brothers at a pimp party with a machinegun and handcuffs (no doubt with the fluffy variety) ?it?s just plain ridiculous! There is however a bit of promise with the story containing snippets of inhouse fighting (violence), an essence of matters of a sexual nature (low level sexual references) and attempted vulgarity (c o a r s e language) ? so it has the possibility of a redeeming sequel??By the grace of god let?s hope not!
The story so far???(as quoted)
In the beginning.......... there was me. Parko then died. but another came and he said ?I am back with a vengance? give me shoes! Call me Arnold! kiss my butt! shoes wear out (What the crap is happening here is anyone?s guess!) for extra flavour , the butt smelt, he washed it, once a year, with his shirt over his head, then he said,? it was good for the time?, then he said? Yeah baby YEAH!?. Meanwhile, the cookiemonster spanked Elmo for hiding the cookies from big bird up his butt therby inventing brownies and girl guides 3 words, ?wait a minute? said the Cookiemonster ?you're not Elmo?, ?No, I'm Bart, eat my shorts with chocolate milk? -too many words not enough time too much love perishes with time, big hard ones, dont last long Unless on Viagra, whos your daddy, "NOT YOU MUG" %uck u slug (Wheels really starting to fall off the wagon at this point!!) - What part of the rules didnt you understand Bkgone?
The comment was NOT directed at you, you could have played along and said something along the lines of "replied big bird" ?(Wheels off!!) ? ?here we go?, said the child - u had 2 spoil it didnt u,it rimed so i said it.Wasnt directed at u (axle?s scrapping at this point)- What a ballsup!! Almaron.......is that you in your avatar...LOL?? THE NEXT DAY... I would really (clash of storyline) The cookie cops tossed my salad into the black panther's tree house ... which was high, were mummy panther, was looking very, out of place, off her tree, smelling dirty old, needing a bath, but couldn't afford, to go on, so he died, and than a, Enormous big snake, ate a hamburger, but found out, this is weird, with a vegence, and with passion, it will happen, as easily as, $hit on toast, with all there, in my humble, for sheezy my, slithering little girl, whom I love, with Branstonpickles, Ahem he said, ?i hate pickles?, why so lugubrious?, ?what a fickle?, said the blind pimpernickel, to the Bilges my friends, afro fish head, is so sweet, so he thinks, snakes are great, he is right, but got eaten, by a big, great white shark, who was on, the Denton show, and by crikey, he looked like, he was buggered, so he cried, what can I, do tomorrow night? yes i must!!!! not foget too, get my hair, c ut and styled, And with that..., i'll be stunning.........., as a big..., One eyed snake....., in a bag, what shall I, say to mother, when she visits, my ugly sisters, and her two, militant black brothers, were on there, way to get, A LARGE MACHINEGUN, and a pair, of handcuffs to, wear to the, pimps night out, WITH BIG DADDY, and the midgets, who is hectic, herper on msn, or could be, Irwins on ABC, ha ha ha, lets start again, what a pain, all is lost, brendan spencer cheated, woe is me, woe is everyone, woe goin' cheap!, Birds going cheep!, woe is cheaper, than a sneaker, mmm shoes again, whoa there Neddy, stop touching freddy, you'll go blind, with hairy palms, and sandpaper sheets, and great big, bulging fish eyes, When the sun, burnt his bum, then his mum, put his thumb, right on her, machine gun. After, constapation had ceased, sleeping in peace, WAS THE NEXT, bathroom laboratory sponge, was sucked dry, dripped illuminous goo, on the goat, with wellhung ploughboy, then it died!, n came alive...., so life goes, this is dumb, on and on, like this story, on and on, like this story, it won't stop, well whats next, to talk about, (The agony is starting to set in at this stage) - please nooo more, POSTS ON HERE, must keep going, BECAUSE I QUIT, no you don?t, OH... NOT AGAIN, got a headache, what will happen, if my brain, will soon explode!
And yes?I?m having a quiet, relaxing day!
I?m sorry but I give this craptacular story 0/10. There?s no storyline, it jumps from character to character at a whim, there?s something going on about black brothers at a pimp party with a machinegun and handcuffs (no doubt with the fluffy variety) ?it?s just plain ridiculous! There is however a bit of promise with the story containing snippets of inhouse fighting (violence), an essence of matters of a sexual nature (low level sexual references) and attempted vulgarity (c o a r s e language) ? so it has the possibility of a redeeming sequel??By the grace of god let?s hope not!
The story so far???(as quoted)
In the beginning.......... there was me. Parko then died. but another came and he said ?I am back with a vengance? give me shoes! Call me Arnold! kiss my butt! shoes wear out (What the crap is happening here is anyone?s guess!) for extra flavour , the butt smelt, he washed it, once a year, with his shirt over his head, then he said,? it was good for the time?, then he said? Yeah baby YEAH!?. Meanwhile, the cookiemonster spanked Elmo for hiding the cookies from big bird up his butt therby inventing brownies and girl guides 3 words, ?wait a minute? said the Cookiemonster ?you're not Elmo?, ?No, I'm Bart, eat my shorts with chocolate milk? -too many words not enough time too much love perishes with time, big hard ones, dont last long Unless on Viagra, whos your daddy, "NOT YOU MUG" %uck u slug (Wheels really starting to fall off the wagon at this point!!) - What part of the rules didnt you understand Bkgone?
The comment was NOT directed at you, you could have played along and said something along the lines of "replied big bird" ?(Wheels off!!) ? ?here we go?, said the child - u had 2 spoil it didnt u,it rimed so i said it.Wasnt directed at u (axle?s scrapping at this point)- What a ballsup!! Almaron.......is that you in your avatar...LOL?? THE NEXT DAY... I would really (clash of storyline) The cookie cops tossed my salad into the black panther's tree house ... which was high, were mummy panther, was looking very, out of place, off her tree, smelling dirty old, needing a bath, but couldn't afford, to go on, so he died, and than a, Enormous big snake, ate a hamburger, but found out, this is weird, with a vegence, and with passion, it will happen, as easily as, $hit on toast, with all there, in my humble, for sheezy my, slithering little girl, whom I love, with Branstonpickles, Ahem he said, ?i hate pickles?, why so lugubrious?, ?what a fickle?, said the blind pimpernickel, to the Bilges my friends, afro fish head, is so sweet, so he thinks, snakes are great, he is right, but got eaten, by a big, great white shark, who was on, the Denton show, and by crikey, he looked like, he was buggered, so he cried, what can I, do tomorrow night? yes i must!!!! not foget too, get my hair, c ut and styled, And with that..., i'll be stunning.........., as a big..., One eyed snake....., in a bag, what shall I, say to mother, when she visits, my ugly sisters, and her two, militant black brothers, were on there, way to get, A LARGE MACHINEGUN, and a pair, of handcuffs to, wear to the, pimps night out, WITH BIG DADDY, and the midgets, who is hectic, herper on msn, or could be, Irwins on ABC, ha ha ha, lets start again, what a pain, all is lost, brendan spencer cheated, woe is me, woe is everyone, woe goin' cheap!, Birds going cheep!, woe is cheaper, than a sneaker, mmm shoes again, whoa there Neddy, stop touching freddy, you'll go blind, with hairy palms, and sandpaper sheets, and great big, bulging fish eyes, When the sun, burnt his bum, then his mum, put his thumb, right on her, machine gun. After, constapation had ceased, sleeping in peace, WAS THE NEXT, bathroom laboratory sponge, was sucked dry, dripped illuminous goo, on the goat, with wellhung ploughboy, then it died!, n came alive...., so life goes, this is dumb, on and on, like this story, on and on, like this story, it won't stop, well whats next, to talk about, (The agony is starting to set in at this stage) - please nooo more, POSTS ON HERE, must keep going, BECAUSE I QUIT, no you don?t, OH... NOT AGAIN, got a headache, what will happen, if my brain, will soon explode!
And yes?I?m having a quiet, relaxing day!
